Today Holly woke up to the smell of food coming from
the kitchen. She had recently moved into her own apartment after finishing
college so her home felt a little empty. She was now at her parents’ house
because she still didn’t have her utilities on which meant her apartment was a
box with furniture. Holly decided to get out of bed and follow the enticing
smell. Holly walked along the cold hardwood floor barefoot. It wasn’t worth it
to get her clean socks dirty or that’s what she was telling herself since she
left her favorite pair of slippers in her apartment. She greeted her mother
with a nice and hearty “Good morning” to which her mother replied with the
same.
“How are you this fine morning?” Holly’s mother
asked.
“Oh
I’m great but it looks like your toast isn’t.”
The smell of burning bread permeated the air.
“Oh now that was the last of it. Looks like there
won’t be any toast to go with the rest of our breakfast.”
All this talk of bread brought up a question.
“That reminds me, are
you going to make biscuits tonight for dinner?”
“I don’t have the ingredients for it so I guess not.”
“No worries I can go
buy those premade ones and some more bread while I’m at it.”
Holly went to go get ready for her excursion for
bread and biscuits. She took a quick shower and contemplated on putting on an
actual outfit or throwing on a trench coat over her pajamas. She thought it
over and realized that she could look suspicious wearing a trench coat.
“Real outfit it is.”
As she left she called out a loud goodbye to her
mother. She took the 10 minute drive to the store and bought the two items she
needed. As she walked out of the store into the store’s parking lot on the way to
her car she had an idea. She thought she would go to the bakery right across
the street from the grocery store. The lack of carbohydrates in her body left
her craving some pastries. She bought two whole bags of delicious pastries. So
delicious that she almost ate half of the pastries in one bag on the way back
to her car. As soon as she started up the car and tossed her bags of pastries
in the backseat she checked the time on her watch:
“10:45, still early” She said aloud to herself.
Holly started up the car and backed out of the
grocery store parking lot. She was going to turn on the radio when she
remembered that there was a music store not too far away from where she was. It
took about five minutes to get to the music store. Holly parked her car just up
the block from the music store. After walking from her car to the store she
entered the store being welcomed with the sound of jazz playing in the
background. Holly was so caught up in the music she didn’t even realize that
she had spent an hour there. Holly was an impulse buyer. She bought five vinyl
records to go with a record player she didn’t own and a guitar that she didn’t
know how to play.
After exiting the music store with her questionable
purchases she brought them back to her car. As soon as she got back into the
driver’s seat she had another idea. She could go to that pottery place she
always passes by on her way to her job. It was about 20 minutes away from where
she was now. When Holly entered the pottery place the first thing she noticed
was the smell of clay. At first she was only going to look at the pottery but
then she was persuaded by the shop owner to join the pottery class that was just
beginning. Besides the first class was free. She was going to make a vase. It was going to take an hour for her vase to
dry, so she had to come back later.
Holly thought about where to go next, to waste time for an hour. She went to the florist to get some flowers
for her vase, she loved tulips so she bought one in every color that the
florist had. It had been an hour since
she left the pottery place, so she headed back there to pick up her vase. The day did not feel complete.
“Where to now?”
She noticed that it was a nice day, so she went to
the park. She sat on the bench and watched people feed the squirrels. She
watched as one squirrel was fed a piece of bread, that’s when she thought to
herself:
“I’d better get home, mom’s waiting for me to bring
her the bread and biscuits.
Off she
went, back to her car to head home.
As soon as she opened the door to the house, her mom
asked:
“Where in the world have you been all this time?”
With a sly
grin Holly answered, “At the store, picking up your bread and biscuits.”
“Hmm” said
her mom.

This story was well written. However, I'm a bit confused on what the conflict was supposed to be. Perhaps you should develop the story even further.
ReplyDeleteI really admire the simplicity of your story. I noticed there is no character development however it adds the uniqueness to your story.
ReplyDeleteVery nice and simple. I enjoyed reading this.
ReplyDeleteThat was very amusing! I like how you showed how easily distracted Holly is, instead of simply telling. Great work, Alana!
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