See it 1994 and being the flyest boy in the school is pretty important. Then you spot a boy with some Timbs on, some robin jeans, a nice polo shirt and a black marmot coat, with his skully tilted a little on his head, with the greatest smile and cutest face, but the best of it all is he has the best smell, its almost like he paid about $1,000 just to smell that good. Thats the description on JP, this boy is the full package. Besides his description before he's tall, cool hair, nice smile, gorgeous face, fly guy, strong, athletic, goofy and friendly. JP is a bad boy and does " bad" things. He cuts school, smokes weed and loves to flirt with girls meanwhile he dates Alizay. He has a problem with being faithful to Alizay, and she doesn't trust him so she cries, gets jealous, stresses over him so much but still loves the kid. Word around Harlem Arts High there's a new girl in school and no doubt about it that Jay P can't resists fresh meat.
Alizay was just told by Becky, her best friend since 2nd grade that JP is flirting with the pretty new girl in the gym. Alizay knows that its time for her to put a stop to this and end it. Alizay walks into the gym she sees the girl and notices that thats her cousin Nina that just moved from Brooklyn to Harlem. Alizay screams "Nina!" And she quickly turns around and runs to Alizay to give her a hug.
JP slowly escapes the gym without them even noticing. He starts walking to the cafeteria where Becky was and sat all the way at the back where there's an isolated table that nobody even looks at. Its a spot to get your privacy sometimes you'll catch the drug dealers there making their money but thats about it.
"Why'd you take so long? " becky told JP.
" Atleast i bought us some time."
" I really don't know how to break the news to her, its like I do everything in my power to break up with her but she won't leave me."
" I dont even know how shes going to feel but i rather you tell her sooner than later, just do it yourself JP because i can't hide this anymore. I'm in love with you and it feels like the worst thing ever. If anyone catches us one day doing anything rather than speaking about her then my new name would be "Becky the hoe, or homewrecker and i ain't tryna hear none of that."
" It doesnt matter what her or anybody thinks."
"Yeah, well shes my best friend, and I betrayed her. But I didnt plan on falling in love with you."
" She'll be fine. We didn't plan this i get it babe. It just happened, you deserve to be treated like a queen, I get it, you don't want to be in the shadows anymore."
"Well i have to tell her, because i'm so done with feeling guilty, and like i need to hide everything."
So the day went by and JP got home and ate dinner with his mom and spoke to her about what's going on. He felt like he needed to get it off his chest and since he knows that momma knows best he spoke to her about it.
"Baby just follow your heart, " said JP's mom.
"Ma its not that easy, I know I do stupid things but i dont want to break her heart."
"This is a complicated situation baby but you'll figure out what to do." She gave him a kiss and went to put away the dishes in the sink.
They finished dinner and Jay P went to shower. it took him longer than usual, he took about an hour to get out and it normally on takes him 20 minutes to shower. He only got out because his skin was getting wrinkly and thats when he realized he's been in there so long. He got out and put on his Tommy Hilfiger pajama shirt and boxers. He went to lay on his bed and then he checked his beeper. He seen a message saying "I'm done with you, its over " from Alizay, and was stuck for about a minute. He couldn't believe it. As soon as he was just about to text Becky telling her that god had answered their prayers, she also texted him saying " it's just not meant to be, if it was we would've been together, and I'm betraying someone whos been here for me since forever, so i think we should just stay as friends." JP didn't take it serious, he just laughed it off and went to sleep.
The next day he went to school and didn't even look at Alizay, he seen Becky by the girls bathroom and grabbed her and kissed her in front of everyone. She didn’t do anything, didn't even push him away, she kissed JP back. Then Alizay came around and caught them and she just stood and watched them.
How dare they do such a thing to me. No wonder these lil fake back stabbers acted so weird around each other. I really should go and smack the shit out of her lying, unfaithful self. And me thinking he was the worst when it was really her, she could've just told me and maybe just maybe i would've been able to forgive her.Now all i wanna do is destroy her face, how could she after almost 10 years of being friends and she'd just play me like that. Maybe its best to kill them with kindness, i deserve better anyways, I'll let her figure out that everything that glitters aint gold. He ain't even all that for me to be stressing anyways, i'm just going to congratulate them and walk away. Alizay walks towards them and says " well im happy for you too, congrats." And instead of walking away she slaps Becky in her face and spits on JP and walks away. And maybe she got a little carried away, but they let her have it, they didn't even go after her.

I loved your story it was so relatable. I loved how you developed JP it was like I knew him lol. And that conflict was so shocking I didn't expect that at all!
ReplyDeleteI loved the realistic aspects of this story, which makes it so similar to today's generation. Great character descriptions! Great work :)
ReplyDeleteI agree with Elyse and Brianna that you create realistic teen characters. Proofread your work before submitting it- there are too many mistakes for a final draft!
ReplyDeleteLove the voice in this!
ReplyDeleteThe characters were very realistic, and I think the voice is great as well. I thought the description of JP in the beginning was really good. Good work, Ruth!
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